老师继上次拿了一篇ChatGPT写的AP语言与写作的作文给到考官批改之后,老师觉得这件事情很好玩。我又拿了托福的一个作文题目给到机器人(这里要感谢我美国的学生Aaron帮我提交给机器人),然后我将这篇作文交给现任托福写作考官进行判分。结果会怎样呢?这对我们理解机器人的能力有什么启发呢?
作文的题目是:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world today is just so busy and crowded, we should not expect people to be polite to one another.
机器人的作品
The idea that the fast-paced and overpopulated world of today excuses individuals from exhibiting politeness towards each other is a flawed notion. Politeness and good manners are integral elements of society that should be maintained even in the face of hectic and demanding circumstances.
In today's fast-paced and overpopulated world, politeness and good manners are more crucial than ever in creating a harmonious and calming atmosphere and in fostering strong relationships between individuals. For example, in a congested city, where individuals are in a constant state of urgency and competing for limited resources, a simple act of holding a door open for someone or allowing them to go ahead in line can significantly reduce stress levels and tensions.
Additionally, good manners and polite behavior play a vital role in professional settings, where they help to establish positive images and strong relationships with colleagues and clients. In a fast-paced work environment, politeness can help to prevent misunderstandings and conflicts that can have damaging effects on professional and personal life.
It is important to note that politeness and good manners are not just limited to face-to-face interactions. In a world where electronic communication dominates, it is equally crucial to exhibit polite behavior through electronic media, such as email and social media. A simple "thank you" or "please" in an electronic message can go a long way in maintaining a polite and respectful tone in our digital interactions.
In conclusion, the fast-paced and overpopulated world should not serve as a justification for individuals to abandon politeness and good manners. Instead, politeness and good manners should be upheld and encouraged, as they play a crucial role in creating a harmonious and peaceful society, fostering strong relationships, and enhancing professional and personal life. The demonstration of polite behavior, regardless of the circumstances, should always be a priority for individuals who wish to maintain a harmonious and respectful society.
考官给分:4
(满分5分,对应是25分/满分30分)
按照官方评分标注给出的理由:
1. Addresses the topic and task well, though some points may not be fully elaborated (能够很好的答题,尽管有些要点没有充分展开)。这里重点要关注第二段和第三段。
2. Is generally well organized and well developed, using appropriate and sufficient explanations, exemplifications and/or details. (整体上能够很好的组织展开,使用恰当充分的解释举例以及或者细节)。这里明显没有达到五分的标准。
3. Displays unity, progression and coherence, though it may contain occasional redundancy, digression, or unclear connections.(展现出统一、连续以及连贯,但是会有偶尔的冗余、跑题或者不清晰的连接)。这里应该是机器人为了能够达到一些形式或者结构的美,而忽视了内容的连贯。
考官给出的整体反馈评价:
1. A strong, error-free essay with good sentence variety and complexity. However, there is a sense of under-development, particularly with paragraph 3. (功底很好,句子的多样性和复杂度很高,没有语法错误。然而,整体上展开不充分,尤其是第三段。)这个达不到ETS的要求。
2. Redundancy in the form of repeated words and phrases gives the feel of using filler material. (重复使用词汇给人感觉在使用填充材料)也就是感觉像在凑数一样。
考官对于其他一些小的细节也给出了评价。
这是考官给到的评分和评价(考官还按照老规矩,帮我修改了一下这个文章,修改到满分。如果有同学想要看一下考官修改的版本,可以联系下面的小助手获取。)
我们现在可以分析一下这篇文章和之前AP语言与写作那篇文章上面机器人表现的差异。之前那篇AP文章满分六分,机器人得了两分。今天这一篇,最高分五分机器人得了四分。也就是说,机器人在托福作文的表现明显优于它在AP语言与写作的表现。原因在哪里?
1. 写作要求不一样。之前那一篇是分析性文章,要求对一篇文章进行分析,今天这一篇纯粹是论述型文章。也就是说机器人在分析方面还是不如单一的说理。
2. AP语言与写作的分析性文章更多需要共情(empathy),而托福的写作更多是逻辑。
以上这两点符合目前大家主流的观点:机器人在深层次的思想以及分析方面还是有待提高的,这其实也是它和人的主要区别。
3. 机器人的优势在那里呢?语法句法不会有问题,因为这些是算出来的。
4. 机器人在做题方面的劣势呢?它对于出题的要求的精确理解是有问题的,也就是DEGREE程度的问题。例如它有展开的概念,但是展开到何种程度才是足够、充分,它就需要继续学习了。但是,ChatGPT据说是有学习能力的,如果我们喂给它充分的满分作文,它应该可以学会的。
对我们的启发在哪里呢?对孩子们的启发是什么呢?对老师的启发是什么呢?“危”和“机”分别是什么?