2024Fall美本申请的进度条已经过半，已经提交了早申的同学可以稍微喘口气了，也还有不少同学还在紧张地忙碌着。
最近在文书上遇到问题的同学可不少，今天老师就来分享一篇干货吧~
当申请你的梦校时，你的文书是脱颖而出的最佳工具之一，为了确保你的文书能够吸引招生官的目光，有一个引人注目的开头十分重要！
我们来假设一个背景：一位同学打算写一篇关于她经营犬类服从课程经历的个人陈述，该怎么为文书找到个完美的切入点呢？下面我们来看看这4个例子：
1、以一个故事开头
人们喜欢故事，所以讲故事是吸引读者的一个好方法。简述一个相关的故事可以为你的文书提供背景，并且可以让读者知道你正在克服一个障碍或迎接一个挑战，你将面临什么。
例如：
On the day that I told my mother I wanted to start my own canine obedience school, she smiled and muttered something under her breath about the irony of my youthful disobedience and my newfound passion for enforcing rules. What she didn’t know then was that it was not in spite of, but rather because of, my tendency to push the boundaries that I was confident in my ability to succeed.
2、场景描述
让你的文书生动起来并吸引读者的一个方法是将他们投入到一个重要场景的中间。为读者提供描述性的细节和对话，让他们感觉像在看一部你生活中的电影。
例如：
I jumped back as the dog lunged for my leg, teeth bared and snarling. “It’s okay, Smokey, it’s okay,” I soothed as I tried to maneuver closer to the post where I had tied his leash. In the back of my head, I heard my brother’s taunts swirling around.
“A dog trainer?” he had scoffed. “What kind of person would hire you as a dog trainer?!”
I pushed the thoughts away and grasped the leash, pulling it tightly to my side as Smokey, surprised by my sudden confidence, fell into stride beside me.
3、问个问题
在文书的开头提出一个问题可以激活你的读者的批判性思维，让他们渴望得到你在后面才会给出的答案。试着想出一个足够宽泛的问题，答案最好设置得出人意料，又在情理之中。
例如：
How do you respond when you’re faced with a very real physical threat to your safety, yet you literally can’t afford to back down? This is the question I faced on my very first day as a dog trainer.
4、使用隐喻或者明喻
隐喻或明喻可以帮助读者将看似不相关的话题联系起来，或者鼓励他们从不同的角度思考话题，从而吸引读者。
例如：
Running canine obedience classes is a lot like navigating high school. It’s a dog-eat-dog world with a lot to learn, many personalities to manage, peril around every corner, and everyone anxious to graduate.
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