2023年雅思写作外教范文:你会写线图小作文吗?

今天,给大家带来一个IELTS思城镇规划类小作文的原创范文。

题目:

2023年雅思写作外教范文#23:你会写线图小作文吗? (含音频和讲解视频)

- Model Answer 高分范文 -

The line graph shows the midyear populations of China, India, and the USA, measured in millions, from 1950 to the year 2000.

Overall, all three countries witnessed an increase in their populations, with China and India both increasing at nearly the same rate; whereas, America’s population growth rate was much more subdued and was far less than the other two nations.

In 1950, China’s population stood at approximately 580 million and India’s 200 million less, (1)a variance that rose only slightly to 250 million by the end of the whole period. Likewise, the United States also had roughly the same difference with India in 2000 as at the beginning of the period, but whose population number only increased slowly throughout the fifty years.

The only significant deviation from the parallel trend of China and India was between the years 1959 to about 1963, when China registered a brief period of stagnant population growth, standing at 650 million for those four years, which thereafter, resumed climbing.

Conversely, the United States saw an extremely gradual yet consistent increase to just below the 300 million mark, (2)almost a full billion fewer people than China by the turn of the century.

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

Standard Task 1 Phrases 雅思小作文地道表达积累:

  • The line graph shows 该线图展示了
  • measured in 以……为单位
  • the year 2000
  • Overall, 总体来说
  • witnessed an increase 见证了增长
  • increasing at near enough 大约增长了
  • far less than 比……少得多
  • stood at approximately 大约处于
  • rose only slightly to 轻微增长
  • by the end of the whole period 整个期间的末期
  • increased slowly 缓慢增长
  • parallel trend of 平行的趋势
  • was between the years
  • registered a brief period of 短时间
  • standing at 处于
  • resumed climbing 恢复增长
  • saw an 见证了
  • gradual 逐渐的
  • consistent increase to 持续增长
  • below the ___ mark 低于……
  • at the turn of the century 在世纪之交

Vocabulary 高分地道词汇:

  • growth rate 增长率
  • subdued 低缓的
  • variance 差异
  • significant 显著的
  • deviation 偏差
  • registered 展示出
  • stagnant 停滞的
  • resumed 继续;恢复
  • extremely 极其;非常
  • mark (point) 标记

Cohesion (C&C words and phrases) 把这些简单的词用好,在"连贯与衔接"方面轻松拿分:

  • from + year + to
  • Overall,
  • their
  • , with
  • same
  • ; whereas,
  • much more
  • far less than
  • the other two
  • and
  • less
  • that
  • only
  • by the end of the whole period
  • Likewise,
  • also
  • roughly
  • , but which only
  • , when
  • , standing at
  • those
  • , which thereafter,
  • Conversely,
  • yet
  • just
  • , almost
  • than

- Items to note -

(1) By following a noun or adjective with a comma and then ‘a’ (an), it allows us to further identify the noun. This is a common technique, called an ‘appositive phrase’ (同位语), that can also be used in Task 2, especially in the introduction for an opinion essay, where we can identify the topic as: ‘, a viewpoint I agree with...’

(2) Same as point one, but with the adverb ‘almost’ placed before the ‘a’.

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