雅思笔试写作真题外教范文:解决交通问题的最佳方式

你好呀,我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天,给大家带来一个IELTS思大作文真题(2021.11.20)的原创范文。

老规矩,以下是正文目录:

1,题目

2,审题

3,高分范文

4,范文朗读

5,范文地道词汇中英对照,包括:

题目改述

观点类大作文高分句型

展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语

展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型

题目:

The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities rather than the suburbs and countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

审题:

Type: Opinion 观点类大作文 (我的观点:not the best way)

Body 1: good but causes societal problems

Body 2: however, creation and connecting of satellite communities is better, as is creating an effective public transportation system

Key word(s): ‘the best way’ — this is what we will argue for or against.

- Model Answer 高分范文 -

范文音频戳这里

These days, it is commonly cited that the best method for solving traffic congestion and transport issues is to persuade citizens to inhabit metropolises instead of suburban and rural areas. In my opinion, though this concept certainly has positive aspects, I do not think it is the best method to solve these transportation-related challenges.

The central tenet behind this concept of centralizing work and living spaces to reduce traffic issues is based on the idea that people will have no use for vehicles, and thus, fewer cars will be seen on the road. This idea though, is likely to cause another problem in place of the one it solves, namely overcrowding, suggesting that by convincing people to locate in one dense metropolitan center, other societal problems will arise. In fact, studies show that overcrowding leads to a multitude of social issues, such as increased domestic violence, and so, while centrally positioning accommodation and place of work together will reduce traffic, the trade-off in problems this would likely produce seem not to warrant such a policy.

This is not to say, however, that the concept of centralization is incorrect. In fact, this concept is one of the most effective means to solve traffic congestion, but instead of centrally locating all jobs and homes in one area, they can be situated in smaller zones. This has occurred in Guangzhou, China, for example, where many of the satellite towns, suburbs and rural areas surrounding the city have become mini-centers of business and industry in their own right. Such specialization, coupled with an effective public transport network, has given rise to residents being able to live close to their work, yet without being overcrowded, while simultaneously, allowing them the convenience of living near the city.

In conclusion, while the concept of centralization is a sound proposal for reducing traffic issues, persuading people to amass in one central area for both work and living will likely cause overcrowding; hence, I believe business specialization of satellite towns and surrounding metropolitan areas, connected by an effective public transport system, is more practical in helping to solve traffic congestion.

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

- (1) Introduction

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改述:

  • way = method
  • to solve = for solving
  • traffic and transportation problems = traffic congestion and transport issues
  • to encourage = to persuade
  • people = citizens
  • to live in= to inhabit
  • cities = metropolises
  • rather than = instead of
  • the suburbs = suburban areas
  • countryside = rural areas

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 观点类大作文高分句型:

  • These days,
  • it is commonly cited that
  • In my opinion,
  • though this concept
  • I do not think it is the

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

  • is to
  • instead of
  • though this
  • certainly
  • these

Vocabulary 高分地道词汇和短语:

  • traffic congestion 交通阻塞
  • issues 问题
  • to persuade 劝服
  • citizens 居民
  • inhabit 居住
  • metropolises 都市
  • suburban 郊区的
  • -related (e.g. transportation-related challenges) ……相关的

- (2) Body 1 -

Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到:

The best way to solve traffic and transportation problems is to encourage people to live in cities

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

The central tenet behind this concept of….is based on

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语

  • the central tenet 中心原理
  • centralizing 集中
  • vehicles 车辆
  • ‘on the road’ 在路上
  • in place of 取代
  • overcrowding 过度拥挤
  • convincing people to 劝说人们
  • dense 密集的
  • societal problems 社会问题
  • multitude of 大量的;很多
  • domestic violence 家暴
  • positioning 安置
  • accommodation 住处;住宿
  • the trade-off in 回报
  • to warrant 使有必要;(做某事的)正当理由/依据

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

  • is based on
  • that
  • , and thus,
  • , fewer
  • This idea though,
  • another
  • , namely
  • , suggesting that
  • , other
  • in fact,
  • leads to
  • , such as
  • , and so, while
  • this
  • such

- (3) Body 2 -Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到

I do not think it is the best way to solve these transportation-related challenges

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

This is not to say, however, that the concept of

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语:

  • zones 区域
  • satellite towns 卫星城
  • mini-centers 微中心
  • in their own right 单独地
  • specialization 专门化
  • public transport network 公共交通网
  • simultaneously 同时
  • the convenience of living near 居住在……的便利性

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

  • This is not to say, however, that
  • In fact,
  • One of the best ways to
  • , but instead of
  • , they
  • This
  • , for example, where
  • have become
  • coupled with
  • , has given rise to
  • , yet
  • , while simultaneously
  • , allowing them

- (4) Conclusion -

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型:

  • In conclusion,
  • while the
  • , I believe

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语:

  • a sound proposal 不错的提议
  • amass 聚集;积累

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

  • , while
  • Hence,
  • , connected by
  • , is

 

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