雅思大作文7分范文及解析：延长刑期减少犯罪

双边类大作文，犯罪类话题

Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

题目来源：2019年3月14日亚太雅思大作文

1、题目大意

有人认为减少犯罪最好的方式是延长坐牢的时间。而另一些人认为其他方法会更好。讨论双方观点，并给出自己的看法

2、思路解析

这是一道双边类大作文，聊的是减少犯罪的方法。双边类的题目，需要对每个观点分别表达同意或反对，最终的结论就是我的立场，可以是中立（双方都同意或都反对），也可以是单边支持某一方立场。审题时注意两点，一是题目中出现绝对词“the best way”，一般遇到绝对化的观点都是从反对角度切入更好写。二是题目观点限定“reduce crime”，因此论证过程中需要围绕这点展开。下面月半鸭和大家一起来看下具体观点~

首先来看前者观点的合理性。

延长坐牢时间意味着更重的惩罚，能够加大犯罪成本，对于那些潜在的或已经犯罪的罪犯是一种威慑，减少他们初犯或者再犯的可能性。

但是，这个方法并不能称为最好的，因为其存在许多问题。

一是单纯加大惩罚并没有从根本上解决犯罪的原因，比如有些人犯罪可能是因为生计所迫不得不犯罪，加大处罚并不能解决他们如何正常生活的问题

二是延长刑期意味着罪犯与社会脱节的时间会进一步加大，当他们出狱后想要继续融入社会的难度会进一步增加，如果无法回归正常生活并维持生计，他们可能会再次犯罪。

三是延长刑期意味着政府需要投入更高的管理成本，加重政府的财政负担，可能导致政府在其他关于公众安全的领域投入不足，比如警察局的相关预算，进而导致犯罪率难以下降。

然后来看其他可行办法。

一是加强教育，特别是对于青少年，通过教育提高人们法律意识和是非观念，降低违法犯罪的可能性。

二是改善经济情况并提供更多就业机会，当人们能够有合法手段来获得收入时，违法犯罪的意愿也会降低。

三是为已经入狱的罪犯提供更多教育和职业技能培训，同时通过宣传减少人们对于获释人员的歧视，使得他们在出狱能够找到合适的工作并融入社会，减少再犯的几率。

3、提纲

4、高分范文示例

Sadly, there is widespread agreement that “crime is an ever-present condition, even as sickness, disease, and death.”  This universally high proportion of people proven to be involved in felonies necessitates the policy of mass incarceration.  However, the severity of the punishment never effectively deters criminals.  Instead, I believe that tackling the root causes of crime is a better way to go about reducing crime.

Increasingly punitive sentences add little to the deterrent effect of the criminal justice system.  There exists strong criminological evidence that lengthy prison terms are counterproductive for public safety as they result in the incarceration of individuals long past the time that they have aged out of the high crime years.  In most cases, the rates of crime involvement begin declining sharply by a person’s early to mid-twenties and continue on a downward trajectory.  These dynamics challenges the significant meaning of the length and effectiveness of prison terms. Besides, Mass incarceration is also fiscally unsustainable in that as the prison system is expanding, it diverts resources from program and policy initiatives that hold potential for greater impact on public safety.

In the effort to combat crime rate, it would be better and more effective to adopt prevention initiatives to address these root causes.  Although crimes can vary in their typology and methods of execution, most crimes are the result of certain risk factors, such as poverty, unemployment or other less obvious causal factors like the influence of violence in family or movies.  Research studies indicate that intervening early in one’s life diminishes the likelihood of embarking on or persisting in a criminal career.  For those convicted, assigning social workers to teach them useful living and social skills or sometimes simply enhancing the economic reality are proven effective to rehabilitate the offenders and deter them from repeat offences.

In conclusion, the effect of threats of the long period of imprisonment seems to be moderate. Prioritizing interventions of an early age and skills and economic development would largely affect potential deterrent and rehabilitative goals.

5、相关词汇和语法结构

Felony   重罪

Necessitate   使成为必要

Incarceration   监禁、下狱、禁闭

Criminological   刑事学的，犯罪学的

Trajectory   弹道、轨迹

Initiative   倡议、积极性、主动性

rehabilitate   改造、修复