托福写作28+的“反套路”秘籍

你是不是还卡在托福23，是不是学了半年托福写作一分未涨？是不是觉得长难句、高端词汇、深刻逻辑才是高分的“标配”？那你一定要好好看一下这篇文章。在我的托福冲分班里，28+学员早就放弃了这些“伪技巧”，用更简单的方法轻松提分！

今天，我就来揭秘那些让你“突破认知”的提分操作，顺便帮你避开那些“坑人”的误区。

Here is a list of “dos anddon’ts”. Let’s go.

Don'ts

01.放弃复杂句子结构，不写长难句

你是不是觉得，托福写作就是要写出一串串“又臭又长”的句子，才能显得自己“高大上”？错！美国人最讨厌的就是“裹脚布”式的长难句。一句话平均15个词就可以达到托福高分的要求，简洁易读才是王道！

堆砌长难句只会让考官看得头大，并且极大提高犯错频率。分数自然也不会好看。记住：“清晰简洁”才是托福写作的真谛！

在适合（96-105）分段冲分班里的W同学就读于公立高中，曾经是大长句的爱好者，一句话曾经长达60词，比托福阅读还要丧心病狂！经过老师课上课下的苦口婆心循循善诱，文风变成了如图：

In my opinion, it is more reasonable for the government to regulate the social media platforms. It is more authoritative. Some social media companies desire profits from short video traffic. So they are likely to become less strict to regulate their platforms. Companies may lack the incentive to regulate their users and remove armful information. However, government has the power to punish social media companies if they spread harmful information. So, it is more effective for the government to announce a policy to reduce younger children from using social media. Governments can also tax and penalize those companies that do not abide by strict rules. For example, last year our local government announced a policy on platforms to prohibit teenagers from using social media for more than 2 hours on midweek. According to recent research, this policy reduced the number of children who were addicted by social media by 70%. This percentage was remarkably higher than the percentage of previous policy of allowing companies to regulate by themselves. Thus, it is more effective to allow the government to regulate social media platforms.

这篇文章的平均句子长度18.36，他最后得了30分。托福写作28+的“反套路”秘籍

02.少写不确定的高端单词

全篇高中词汇也能高分

你是不是觉得，托福写作就是要用一堆“高大上”的词汇才能镇住考官？NO! 高端单词用错了，分分钟暴露你的“伪学霸”身份。零星的高端词汇不仅不能体现你的语言能力，还会让文章看起来像“拼凑的破布”。高中词汇用得好，照样能拿高分！

同样在（96-105）分段冲分班里的G同学通篇没有一个高端单词，平均单词长度只有4.4个字母。

这是G同学的作文：

In my opinion, schools can offer students summer camps before the school year begins to make the transition to a new school easier for teenagers. Teachers can bring all the new students together and prepare them for the courses in the upcoming semester during the camp. Students can have the opportunity to get familiar with their future classmates, the campus, and the schedule. In contrast, with no such summer camps, it would be very hard for new students to blend in. For example, my friend moved to a different city midway through a semester. He did so intentionally to attend the summer camp organized by his new school. He told me that the camp was really helpful. He made a lot of new friends and got to know the different teaching styles of his teachers. Once the school year begins, no one could tell that he was new to the school.

他最终托福考试成绩也是30分。

托福写作28+的“反套路”秘籍

03.放弃复杂逻辑，简单肤浅没有问题

你是不是觉得，托福写作就是要写出“惊天动地”的深刻逻辑才能打动考官？错！托福写作不是哲学论文，考官也没时间琢磨你的“高深思想”。切题、有细节就够了！逻辑太复杂反而容易写不清楚，考官看不懂，分数自然就低了。记住：简单直接，才是托福写作的“灵魂”！

Though Paul's idea seems plausible, I endorse Kelly that online shopping is affecting society in a positive way overall. First and foremost, it could save people's time spent commuting to shopping venues as well as purchasing. Take me as an example. I am a senior high school students with an overly packed schedule every day. I am constantly bombarded by papers, assignments, projects and other school work. Therefore, it is nearly impossible for me to squeeze my time to go to shopping market to buy some snacks, and it is even harder to go to shopping mall to buy new clothes. However, with shopping site comes a much more convenient way of purchasing. Only clicking on screens can be enough to bring the commodities right on the doorstep. Without online shopping, I cannot imagine how miserable my life would be. Therefore, I totally agree that the advantages of online shopping far outweigh its negative sides.

这是我们（105+）分段冲分班里的L同学的文章，是不是觉得写的很日常，例子就是普通的个人经历，但是切题&有细节。L同学也曾经喜欢写一些复杂逻辑，全篇各种大道理，但是总是容易出各种逻辑问题。老师耳提面命后开始缩短解释的部分，多写例子。L出班实考28分。

托福写作28+的“反套路”秘籍

04.不过多在意简单语法错误

你是不是觉得，三单、名词复数这些小错误会毁了你的高分梦？错！美国人日常说话也会犯这些错误，只要不影响理解，控制住错误频率，小瑕疵不会影响你的高分之路！

下面这段内容来自在适合（96-105）分段冲分班里的Z同学：

In my opinion, the online reviews ofthe productsare not useful. I strongly agree with Andrew’s point that people are more likely to post reviews after a bad experience than after a good one. I’d add that some stores will buy positive reviews but actuallytheir product not worth their while. This kind of story is not rare, for example, Ihavefound a hat online which have lots of marvelous reviews and I bought it due to the marvelousreviewithas. When I finally received it,I found out that this hatis not qualifiedand those positive reviewsareposted by robots. The latest survey conducted by the United Nations, after polling 5000 stores, found that the majority of storeshavebought positive reviewswhich the product does not have.

On the other hand, Claire mentioned that those reviews are written by ordinary consumers who are like us. However, she did not recognize that those consumers are notsameas us. They may come fromdifferent kinds of classesand they have different kinds ofvisual angle.

All in all, I believe that those reviews are not useful for customers.

这是Z同学临近考前的练习，红色部分都是一些语言问题，有三单，有时态混乱，有逗号连接句子，有些句子里没有谓语，还有一些不合适的单词使用。但是她的优点是大部分错误都不影响交流，文章非常切题，有展开有细节，最终考试28。

托福写作28+的“反套路”秘籍